Critique: CM The MC feat. Choice – Away For A While

Posted in Critique on September 24, 2011 by Trus Real

Track: CM The MC feat. Choice – Away For A While

Well this is disappointing.  We get only 16 bars from CM (Right) throughout the whole song.  Quality over quantity, but quality wasn’t able to compensate for lack of a whole verse.  The beat was quite slow so I can understand how certain people like to keep it nice and short for radio play purposes (Note: Singles for the radio should be NO LONGER than 3:00), BUT you must step it up in lyricism.  The song was a love/girl track so no need to get super lyrical, but the lyrics didn’t really do much for me at all.  I know CM personally and he’s usually more raw, so I don’t think this concept fits him very well.  The reason why it was disappointing is because we do not get enough CM.  16 bars in total of mediocre lyrics doesn’t do anybody.  His delivery is mad raw too and usually I would let it pass but for this specific song and concept, I’d have to say it would hurt his rating.  His execution was alright and his energy was calm, exactly what your’re supposed to do when you whisper sweet nothings in a girl’s ear.  His character was himself and he had a very laid back swagger, so I think that was cool, perfect for this situation.  The hook seemed very weak, Choice (Left) knows what he’s doing but I don’t think has the actual voice for it without any serious  effects and trust me there are no serious effects on here, thus leaving it to sound bland.

The Critique: For a track like this, flatten out your flow to make it smoother, girls like smooth.  It may help if you use a beat with a faster tempo so it’ll be easier to shorten/cover gaps in your lines to make your flow seem more natural.  Have the singer use a lot more layers, highs, lows, and even maybe other singers to fill up the hook.  The lyrics are nothing special, depending on what crowd you going for, you’d have to adjust to them.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 3/5

Flow/Delivery: 2/5

Character: 2/2

Energy: 3/3

Lyricism: 2/5

Final Rate: 12/20 WACK Not far from ‘decent’ though.

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Critique: Parallel Kidz – F Bomb Party

Posted in Critique on September 21, 2011 by Trus Real

TRACK: Parallel Kidz – F Bomb Party

Parallel kidz consists of C Dot Castro (Right) and Prolifiq (Left).  This is the first double time track submitted, but wow, these cats are dope!  Their flow is dope and constantly changes up, slows down, and speeds up from both artists.  Their character within the song is really energetic which fits the ‘party theme’ in the song, so that knocks out 2 birds with one stone.  Nice lines, nothing too crazy and nothing too cliche except the “Party” and “Bacardi” scheme.  Def nice hook, but its a bit TOO redundant.  They have bridges, hooks, choruses, and in each one they repeat “fucked up,” which can get annoying to some…. like me.  One part of the hook when 2 people are saying something simultaneously, they need to get the producer to pan them to opposite sides, its frustrating to listen to.  It sounds like 2 people trying to talk over each other.  Their delivery wasn’t as clean as I hoped it to be.  Both artists slipped at least once, which knocks them down a point, but they executed this track nicely.  Kudos.

The Critique: This was a dope track.  Keep an ear out for them slip ups before anyone else does, it isn’t a good look.  I understand you’re trying to make the song catchy, but don’t go over board.  I personally heard it twice and cant hear it anymore, but thats me.  Good job for the most part though.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 5/5

Flow/Delivery: 4/5

Character: 2/2

Energy: 3/3

Lyricism: 3/5

Final Rate: 17/20 DOPE Well done

Critique: Bishop Ninex – 7th Round Draft Pick

Posted in Critique on September 21, 2011 by Trus Real

TRACK: Bishop Ninex – 7th Round Draft Pick

When I found out the beat was Dilla, I got excited.  This is just a long verse really, not a whole song.  But I liked what I heard, just certain things that made me shake my head.  But let’s break it down.  Bishop had some nice word play, spitting in multi’s and shit like “Warm moist vagina with moisturizer” had me going, bravo.  He definitely shined there, but it just seemed like he read it off of his notepad or blackberry.  There was no type of character, swag, or anything to emphasize and/or bring out the word play.  The thing that killed his execution points was a couple HORRID punch-ins.  It was pretty awful.  His delivery was pretty average, he could’ve delivered it a bit smoother.  There were certain parts where the flow got choppy and shakey.  This happened pretty often.  When it came to the ‘6 multi schemes in one line’ part, he def started falling off like he was gasping for breath which contributes to falling off beat a bit.  If I can notice something like that, your execution points drop a bit.  His energy on it was pretty consistent and proper for this beat.  His creativity is where it needs to be at, but he needs to get a grip of the beat as he lays it down.

The Critique: Your lyricism is good and word play is on point but you need to work on that delivery and execute it stronger.  Try punching in more if you can’t go all the way, but also focus on the punch-in transition.  Try to make sure it doesn’t sound like a totally different person jumping in, in each cut.  Your vocal presence on it (Delivery, execution, etc) easily dragged down your dope rhymes.  But this is another example of small changes making a big difference.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 3/5

Flow/Delivery: 2/5

Character: 0/2

Energy: 3/3

Lyricism: 4/5

Final Rate: 12/20 WACK Clean it up 

Critique: Prota J – I Be

Posted in Critique on September 20, 2011 by Trus Real

Track: Prota J – I Be

Alright, I’m going to say this track is overall average to me.  Execution and delivery is strong though it falls off here and there, it stops him from getting the perfect 5/5.  His flow is decent, nothing crazy, but he seems comfortable thus letting his own personality out along with a natural attitude to apply to the feel of the song.  It’s laid back and a little lazy which fits the beat and vibe of the song nicely.  His character is real “swagged” out and it fits this vibe and he has the perfect balance of energy required to apply to the song.  But all in all, his lyrics were mad basic.  Its not amateur, its mostly just bland.  No quotables, punches, multi’s, word play, or memorable lines.  I would say that’s what held him back the most.  So at the end of the day, it’s average.

The Critique: Everything is mostly OK, I would suggest trying to rhyme in multi’s for improvement in lyricism ratings.  Brush up the very small amount of scuffles on certain lines and try shortening your lines to let your words fit better.  I think the rest of your critique is creativity.  Try to play around with rhymes and fool around with different words.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 4/5

Flow/Delivery: 3/5

Character: 2/2

Energy: 3/3

Lyricism: 2/5

Final Rate: 15/20 DECENT

Critique: CGSX OmeGa – Live By The Sword

Posted in Critique on September 20, 2011 by Trus Real

TRACK: CGSX OmeGa – Live By The Sword

The beat reminds me of the shit I used to make in 06.  I like the underground raw feel.  But for real, this joint blew me.  I loved the feel until the 3rd bar started, that’s when everything collapsed.  The flow was sloppy and the lines struggled to stay on beat.  It seemed too rushed.  I’m mad because OmeGa had a strong voice that could help bring out anything he said, but his execution and delivery was so weak, one of his strengths backfired.  It seemed like he was so focused on trying to stay on beat (but failing), he couldn’t focus on pronouncing and articulating his words clear enough for people to hear and understand.  I like where he’s going with concept and the lyrics (from what I can understand) were decent.  Certain parts, OmeGa didn’t rhyme and that pisses me off, thus held him back from getting a 3/5 in Lyricism.  There was no word play or crazy punches and the hook was decent for what it is within it’s flavor of hip hop.  This song needs a LOT of polishing, but as raw as it is, it may not need AS much polishing compared to other sub genres due to it’s content and style.  The poor mixing may play a part in this as well.

The Critique: Focus on riding/flowing on the beat smoother and take your time, pace yourself when laying down your vocals.  That is your biggest problem.  Also touch up on your execution, make sure you pronounce every letter of every word so people can hear what your point is.  But as bad as this review may be, I feel these small touch ups can make the biggest difference in your ratings.

Flavor: Underground Hip Hop

Execution: 1/5

Flow/Delivery: 0/5

Character: 1/2

Energy: 2/3

Lyricism: 2/5

Final Rate: 5/20 WACK But both the song and the artist have a lot of potential

Critique: Goobs – Show Off (Produced by Charli Brown)

Posted in Critique on September 19, 2011 by Trus Real

TRACK: Goobs – Show Off

First off, I’d like to say I really liked the beat, but this doesn’t compensate for what Goobs lack in his verses.  Lyrics are mad basic and it seemed like he got lazy by rhyming the same words, repeating lines, or not even rhyming at all.  As an artist, hearing rhymes that DON’T rhyme make me cringe, so you get no points there.  The vibe of the track is nice, I really like that.  It’s chill and has a sense of both opposite ends of the spectrum together.  But with this vibe and beat you have to say something better than the bland lines displayed throughout this song.  Nothing switches up, so its the same flow over and over.  That too is pretty bland, and it takes so much away from everything else that actually stands out. The hook has flange but its pretty obvious that it needs some pitch correction or even autotune if necessary.  His delivery was basic but it was clear and his execution was pretty solid.  There wasn’t a word in there I couldn’t understand.  Most of his points have to do with staying on beat and speaking clearly. His energy sort fit the concept, but it was too consistent for this topic.  I felt his character and presence on this track was good.

The Critique: Your flow is too broken, extend word emphasis or add in single syllable words to patch in the gaps of your lines to provide a smoother flow.  Try to rhyme every bar more often, after getting into that habit, start working on multi’s.  Expand your vocab.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 2/5

Flow/Delivery: 1/5

Character: 2/2

Energy: 2/3

Lyricism: 0/5

Final Rate: 7/20 WACK and I was quite generous.