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Lambo Anlo – Friday Critique

Posted in Critique on August 27, 2013 by Trus Real

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Watch and Listen Here: Lambo Anlo – Friday

Alright I’m not here to judge videos or acting, because that ain’t my expertise.  But as a person with their own opinion I’d like to like to throw in that homie should put that acting ish to the side. But on a serious tip, the kid can spit.  He got a nice flow, a strong execution, and good presence in his voice.  I like how he has a bridge and hook, not too many artist tend to do that.  Lyrics are eh.  Nothing special, but his flow definitely makes up for it….. to the average listener. But for me, come on son.  You execute everything nicely, but I think he can step up them bars a bit.  He has a few schemes here and there, some light jabs, but nothing worth mentioning. The major issue for me is his redundancy.  Consistency is good, but he’s TOO consistent to the point that all the verses sound the same and it sometimes blends in with the hooks to make it seem like one long verse. Put some character or emotion in your voice.  The beat is redundant too, I know it has nothing to do with him but his redundant tone with his redundant beat can put people to sleep fast. Be the contrast to the beat and switch it up more. The beat is chill, so his energy level goes with the vibe of the song.  But the drinking and smoking concept is starting to get very annoying.  We get it.  You get drunk and high. Who doesn’t? Do something different.

The Critique: You have all the tool necessary to be great.  You just need to utilize them better.  The redundancy is a real killer to my ears. I know the song is mad chill, so I don’t expect a variety of emotions in your voice, but if this is the case, I suggest making it shorter and have someone else do the hook. Keep the same hook if need be, but there needs to be some change in the sound especially when the beat is a 4 bar loop.  Christ.  But you got everything else locked so keep at it and you’ll go far.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 5/5

Flow/Delivery: 5/5

Energy: 3/3

Character: 1/2

Lyricism: 2/5

Final Rate: 16/20 DECENT You could’ve gotten a higher rating if I didn’t get so bored.

 

 

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Raising The Bar Event Critique

Posted in Critique on August 19, 2013 by Trus Real

This past Saturday, I had my Raising The Bar Hip Hop Showcase event.  I will basically critique my own event from an inside and objective viewpoint.

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(My homie Fito Corleone from 848 killing it)

 

Cons:

1. I didn’t want it to be a packed house because this was a trial and error event for future ones.  So that way if there were any errors, it would be only in front of a small crowd of rappers who would understand that when it comes to technology, shit happens.

2. Technical Difficulties… Well, shit happened.  And this can happen to anyone. But we had so many. Feedback issues, volume issues, clarity issues, cord issues, mic issues, I mean it really felt like I was gonna go crazy.  Each issue had different variables so it wasn’t necessarily specifically one person’s fault.  Half way through the show we got things figured out, and the rest went smoothly, but wow was it stressful.

3. Acoustics…. The acoustics of the tiny venue had sound bouncing everywhere and this contributed to the sound quality and clarity, especially with the drummer. That’s just something I couldn’t help. Different venue next time?

4. Misunderstandings… One of the reasons we had issues was sending songs to the DJ.  Some emailed, some brought CD’s, some brought Ipods, phones, etc.  One e-mail apparently didn’t get to the DJ which led to an artist to explode on stage in anger.  I don’t know if the e-mail was sent to the DJ’s spam, or was even sent at all, but it led to a memorable performance from this specific artist that night. But it wasn’t a good memorable. Next time I have to be assertive with how things songs should be sent.

Pros:

1. Full House… The house was packed! Though this isn’t what I wanted or planned to have, I can’t complain about good business.  Usually I’m used to Rap Shows being a small crowd of just rappers and maybe a few of their friends.  But people brought crowds with them and a lot of non-musicians came.  The bar owners were impressed, so I did a good job in that aspect. Though I was still down the hole $80, money in my pocket was the last thing on my mind anyway.

2. Drinks… They were cheap

3. Hotdogs… They were free lol

4. The People… I feel like I let a lot of people down. Maybe it wasn’t a big deal to them, because it wasn’t their show, but with all the issues we had, some people weren’t able to perform, or had to cut their performance short. But everyone (with the exception of one disgruntled artist, who later apologized) was cool about it. People were very supportive of the event and of each other. The vibe was exactly what I was looking for.

Overall, I thought the turn out was great, the performances that didn’t have technical difficulties were dope, but the technical difficulties were the main issue that kept reoccurring.  It stopped the flow of the show. It made both me and the DJ look bad. It had a weak beginning when everyone was there, and had a stronger finish when half of them left.  So over all I give my show a WACK. Who knows if that’s what anyone else thought.  Maybe the issues weren’t that much of a deal to anyone else like it was to me, but like I said… I’m judging objectively.  But its a learning experience and hopefully the next show (If I do another one) will be better because of the lessons I’ve learned from this one.

Thanks to all who came and supported.  I feel I do owe you all a better show for you all to perform at with no issues. I will keep you updated, follow the blog!

Critique: “Trayvon” by Jargon

Posted in Critique with tags , , , , , , , , on July 31, 2013 by Trus Real

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Listen to the track here: http://youtu.be/s-3UkBc7S2g

So this track is about the exhausted topic of the Trayvon Martin case. Concept alone, he should definitely get his information straight.  He claims that Zimmerman is a crazy “white” man. Remember that Zimmerman is of Latino heritage as well, but the case itself is a whole other topic. The beat and his vibe on the track is crazy.  With the recorded 911 call at the end and everything gave me a “Kim” feeling from Eminem. It’s eerie as hell and it’s perfect for the subject matter. Now as I put on my gloves to dig deep into the song, I don’t like what I found. The beat was too slow for the pace of his flow.  This left longer time gaps in between his words which made his flow seem choppy and have this robotic feel. A little character and some stretched syllables could’ve aided him with that.  Later on it sounded like he struggled with rockin the beat somewhere near the end at the “help” part. So big loss of points in 2 categories there. Lyrically he was ok. I was on the fence at the beginning, then it got better as the suspense picked up as well as his delivery. I understand its harder to stay on your multi patterns when telling a story, but he held it down on that aspect. He told the story nicely so he got those points, but what also kinda dragged the song was his monotone delivery. It didn’t have to be a roller coaster of emotions, but there were parts he could’ve added some energy.  He didn’t switch much up either, the verse was kind of the same pattern the whole way through. It was quite boring.  I’d fall asleep if I heard it twice in a row.

The Critique: Maybe he could’ve either found a faster beat, or reworded the lines for additional syllables to fill in the time gaps for a smoother flow. I’m sure this will automatically help with the delivery as well.  Switch the format up a bit for variety.  The lyrics are fine, but the choppy execution took a lot away from it. And for this concept, it’s EXTREMELY emotional and sensitive so to make a song in Trayvon’s narrative is brilliant, but you must take more advantage of the emotional aspect for a much bigger shock value. The monotone delivery held back the full potential of that.

Flavor: Underground Hip Hop

Execution: 3/5

Flow/Delivery: 3/5

Character: 0/2

Energy: 1/3

Lyricism: 4/5

Final Rate: 11/20 Wack I’ve heard better from Jargon

Critique: CM The MC feat. Choice – Away For A While

Posted in Critique on September 24, 2011 by Trus Real

Track: CM The MC feat. Choice – Away For A While

Well this is disappointing.  We get only 16 bars from CM (Right) throughout the whole song.  Quality over quantity, but quality wasn’t able to compensate for lack of a whole verse.  The beat was quite slow so I can understand how certain people like to keep it nice and short for radio play purposes (Note: Singles for the radio should be NO LONGER than 3:00), BUT you must step it up in lyricism.  The song was a love/girl track so no need to get super lyrical, but the lyrics didn’t really do much for me at all.  I know CM personally and he’s usually more raw, so I don’t think this concept fits him very well.  The reason why it was disappointing is because we do not get enough CM.  16 bars in total of mediocre lyrics doesn’t do anybody.  His delivery is mad raw too and usually I would let it pass but for this specific song and concept, I’d have to say it would hurt his rating.  His execution was alright and his energy was calm, exactly what your’re supposed to do when you whisper sweet nothings in a girl’s ear.  His character was himself and he had a very laid back swagger, so I think that was cool, perfect for this situation.  The hook seemed very weak, Choice (Left) knows what he’s doing but I don’t think has the actual voice for it without any serious  effects and trust me there are no serious effects on here, thus leaving it to sound bland.

The Critique: For a track like this, flatten out your flow to make it smoother, girls like smooth.  It may help if you use a beat with a faster tempo so it’ll be easier to shorten/cover gaps in your lines to make your flow seem more natural.  Have the singer use a lot more layers, highs, lows, and even maybe other singers to fill up the hook.  The lyrics are nothing special, depending on what crowd you going for, you’d have to adjust to them.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 3/5

Flow/Delivery: 2/5

Character: 2/2

Energy: 3/3

Lyricism: 2/5

Final Rate: 12/20 WACK Not far from ‘decent’ though.

Critique: Parallel Kidz – F Bomb Party

Posted in Critique on September 21, 2011 by Trus Real

TRACK: Parallel Kidz – F Bomb Party

Parallel kidz consists of C Dot Castro (Right) and Prolifiq (Left).  This is the first double time track submitted, but wow, these cats are dope!  Their flow is dope and constantly changes up, slows down, and speeds up from both artists.  Their character within the song is really energetic which fits the ‘party theme’ in the song, so that knocks out 2 birds with one stone.  Nice lines, nothing too crazy and nothing too cliche except the “Party” and “Bacardi” scheme.  Def nice hook, but its a bit TOO redundant.  They have bridges, hooks, choruses, and in each one they repeat “fucked up,” which can get annoying to some…. like me.  One part of the hook when 2 people are saying something simultaneously, they need to get the producer to pan them to opposite sides, its frustrating to listen to.  It sounds like 2 people trying to talk over each other.  Their delivery wasn’t as clean as I hoped it to be.  Both artists slipped at least once, which knocks them down a point, but they executed this track nicely.  Kudos.

The Critique: This was a dope track.  Keep an ear out for them slip ups before anyone else does, it isn’t a good look.  I understand you’re trying to make the song catchy, but don’t go over board.  I personally heard it twice and cant hear it anymore, but thats me.  Good job for the most part though.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 5/5

Flow/Delivery: 4/5

Character: 2/2

Energy: 3/3

Lyricism: 3/5

Final Rate: 17/20 DOPE Well done

Critique: Bishop Ninex – 7th Round Draft Pick

Posted in Critique on September 21, 2011 by Trus Real

TRACK: Bishop Ninex – 7th Round Draft Pick

When I found out the beat was Dilla, I got excited.  This is just a long verse really, not a whole song.  But I liked what I heard, just certain things that made me shake my head.  But let’s break it down.  Bishop had some nice word play, spitting in multi’s and shit like “Warm moist vagina with moisturizer” had me going, bravo.  He definitely shined there, but it just seemed like he read it off of his notepad or blackberry.  There was no type of character, swag, or anything to emphasize and/or bring out the word play.  The thing that killed his execution points was a couple HORRID punch-ins.  It was pretty awful.  His delivery was pretty average, he could’ve delivered it a bit smoother.  There were certain parts where the flow got choppy and shakey.  This happened pretty often.  When it came to the ‘6 multi schemes in one line’ part, he def started falling off like he was gasping for breath which contributes to falling off beat a bit.  If I can notice something like that, your execution points drop a bit.  His energy on it was pretty consistent and proper for this beat.  His creativity is where it needs to be at, but he needs to get a grip of the beat as he lays it down.

The Critique: Your lyricism is good and word play is on point but you need to work on that delivery and execute it stronger.  Try punching in more if you can’t go all the way, but also focus on the punch-in transition.  Try to make sure it doesn’t sound like a totally different person jumping in, in each cut.  Your vocal presence on it (Delivery, execution, etc) easily dragged down your dope rhymes.  But this is another example of small changes making a big difference.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 3/5

Flow/Delivery: 2/5

Character: 0/2

Energy: 3/3

Lyricism: 4/5

Final Rate: 12/20 WACK Clean it up 

Critique: Prota J – I Be

Posted in Critique on September 20, 2011 by Trus Real

Track: Prota J – I Be

Alright, I’m going to say this track is overall average to me.  Execution and delivery is strong though it falls off here and there, it stops him from getting the perfect 5/5.  His flow is decent, nothing crazy, but he seems comfortable thus letting his own personality out along with a natural attitude to apply to the feel of the song.  It’s laid back and a little lazy which fits the beat and vibe of the song nicely.  His character is real “swagged” out and it fits this vibe and he has the perfect balance of energy required to apply to the song.  But all in all, his lyrics were mad basic.  Its not amateur, its mostly just bland.  No quotables, punches, multi’s, word play, or memorable lines.  I would say that’s what held him back the most.  So at the end of the day, it’s average.

The Critique: Everything is mostly OK, I would suggest trying to rhyme in multi’s for improvement in lyricism ratings.  Brush up the very small amount of scuffles on certain lines and try shortening your lines to let your words fit better.  I think the rest of your critique is creativity.  Try to play around with rhymes and fool around with different words.

Flavor: Hip Hop

Execution: 4/5

Flow/Delivery: 3/5

Character: 2/2

Energy: 3/3

Lyricism: 2/5

Final Rate: 15/20 DECENT